Nice story choice... I liked it more than I expected to. But then I've learned to trust your impeccable taste. :)

I don't really hear the plosives, but then those don't usually bother me much. It's the sibilants that make me want to pull my hair out, most days. I would love to find something to really fix those, once and for all.

Regardless, I especially liked the pacing in this one—very even—and the intro and outro music. Thanks for this!